Friday, October 15, 2010

Dead Stop Heart

 
Snowy laden, frosty weight
Heavy hinges, iron gate

Steamy breathing, icy tears
Crystal clarity, hidden fears

Acid bile, stark pure dread
Deep blue fear, living dead

Tilted gray markers, hammered names
Deep dark thoughts, wormed remains

Coal black raven, lifeless eyes
Oil fired lantern, shroud demise

Flutter movement, scurry scratch
Shudder whine, rusty latch

Bone sinew fingers, skyward reaching
Dead stop heart, vomitus leeching

Dank breath exhale, silent scream
Loose bowel pinch, nightmare dream

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the first of several original poems to celebrate the season
 
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57 comments:

Wings said...

Great poem! Love it, want more!

Copyboy said...

I can totally picture vinny price reading this.

Nariane said...

Whoohooo!
My favourite season.
Great stuff! Keep it coming!

Clarissa Draper said...

Cool poem, Pat. You're really getting into the season with creepy pics and haunting poems.

CD

Talli Roland said...

No...! :) Your posts are too scary now! Bring back Arizons!

Leovi said...

Maravillosamente terrorífico. Ya se lo que le tengo que recitar a mi hijo cuando se porte mal.

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Wow, yours? Didn't know you were a poet as well!

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Wow, yours? Didn't know you were a poet as well!

Leovi said...

I forgot the translation in the previous comment. He was paralyzed with a shudder even at the nape, awesome, very good poem. A greeting.

Pat Tillett said...

Wings - Thanks! than you shall have more!

Jesse - I wish! It does have that feeling...

Nariane - Mine also! there will be more.

Clarissa - thanks! When the weather changes it brings out the dark side....or not!

Talli - Sunny days will be back soon enough Talli. I have some more things for the halloween season first...

Leovi - thanks! It's pretty creepy!

Alex - Thanks Alex. There's a page link under my header to poems. Or in the label column. Oh yeah, it's mine!

Brenda's Arizona said...

Oh man, I am waiting for Halloween to be OVER so I don't get spooked everytime I visit your blog! First it was photos, now it is the poetry...
Good stuff, Pat!

Pat Tillett said...

Brenda - Thanks! A couple more weeks and you will be unafraid!

Marlene said...

I'm almost afraid to tiptoe over here these days...heehee.

Seriously, though.....creepy!!!!! (But kinda fun, too!)

Alice in Wonderland said...

Loved this! Yes, I could just hear Vincent Price reading it!
You should post some more of your poetry here.
Wow, I'm going to have to start and get ready for Halloween too!

Jhon Baker said...

Never thought I would find - loose bowel pinch - so well placed in a poem.

Lynne H. said...

Great poem Pat.. I admire you good writers that can rhyme and have it be good..
Happy Pre-Halloween!!!!

Naturedigital said...

Creepy.. but suitable for the season.
Costas

RawknRobynsGoneBlogWild said...

This is awesome, Pat! It's perfectly worded, free flowing, and scary as hell!
xoRobyn

TS Hendrik said...

Awesome. I loves me some horror poetry.

Nat said...

Ghoulishly good poem....sent a shiver down my spine!

Angela Ackerman said...

Nicely done! You should consider entering the Freaky Writing Contest if you haven't already: http://writersally.blogspot.com/2010/10/freaky-fright-writers-fest.html

Happy weekend!

Angela @ The Bookshelf Muse

Jimmy said...

Very well written Pat, I was impressed with each line as a different feeling came out with each one.

Pat Tillett said...

Marlene - All in good fun!

Alice - Thanks! that would be fantastic! I will post some more...

Jhon - I was giggling even as I wrote it...

Lynne - thanks so much! Tis the season!

Costas - Thanks! This time of year, creepy is good!

Robyn - Thanks Robyn! I'm happy you thought so...

Tim - Me too! It just doesn't seem "normal" to post any other time...

Nat - thanks! I'm god to hear that...

Angela - thanks for stopping by and commenting. I just went to that website...

Jimmy - Thanks Jimmy! I like the way it worked out.

Rabbit (Micael Chadwick) said...

Adore it. And here you've been saying you can't write. My eye!!!

Looking forward to more.

Warren Zoell said...

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=meGloxIMd2s&feature=fvst

John McElveen said...

I'm in awe! I don't know why I should ever be surprised at you immense, diverse and amazing talents!!!

John

altadenahiker said...

Happy Halloween

Pat Tillett said...

Rabbit - thanks! I really do feel that way. I have no real clue about grammar and punctuation rules and I can't spell worth a crap. I need a personal editor...LOL

Warren - Really good video Warren, thanks...

John - Why thank you! Oh please!

Karin - Thanks! Same to you!

Joe Cap said...

Wow, Pat, did you write this? Awesome...and you say you have no talent for music. Let me tell you, writing the lyrics can be the hardest part about writing music! Too bad we don't live near each other, I bet we could collaborate!

Pat Tillett said...

Joe - As far playing something, I can do nothing. I have written some lyrics. I should post some of them and will soon! thanks buddy!

Betty Manousos @ CUT AND DRY said...

You just put me into the season. :)
Love it! Looking forward for more!

Have a great weekend!
Betty

bilsot said...

I belive you are trying to scare us...
I read it in translation to Greek also...

altadenahiker said...

Some little boy really likes his Halloween. (This little girl does, too.)

Georgina Dollface said...

Cool! The cadence in this reminds me of the three witches from Macbeth. - G

Leovi said...

Si me ataca alguno de sus muertos vivientes tengo oro para sobornarlo.

Songsnwords said...

Scary, Scary, Scary....almost felt I was reading a prologue to a horror novel...multifaceted are we??? ;D

Warren Zoell said...

It's just that your poem reminded me of Alan Parsons musical interpretation of Poes work.

Pat Tillett said...

Joe - missed the last line. Yeah, that would be fun. I wrote hundreds of poems and lyrics in the past and some where along the way, they all turned up missing. I think during a move! I was so upset!

Betty - Thanks! there will be more! You have a good weekend also.

bilsot - I am trying to scare you!

altadenahiker - Maybe I enjoy them so much now, because they weren't so hot when I was a kid.

Georgina - Thanks so much! I wanted the poem to feel very old.

Leovi - Thanks so much! the "undead" always intrigued me. I'm still waiting for the zombies to appear.

Songwords - thanks! I so happy you said that! I may be multifaceted, but I'd rather be exceptional at a single thing. jack of all trades and master of none...

Warrenn - I got the feeling. That's why I really liked it...

Anthony J Langford said...

Excellent Poem Pat.
Very creative.
I was pretty happy with my poem too this week. Must be the season.
Great work mate.

=]

Toni said...

ooooo....creepy! I love this time of year!

Chuck said...

I agree that this would have been perfect for Vincent Price to recite on Halloween...with appropriate music of course. Great poem Pat.

Pat Tillett said...

Anthony - Thanks! you are right, it's the season inspiring us...

Toni - Me too! My favorite non-holiday season...

chuck - I agree! He'd have to be wearing a velvet smoking jacket sitting in a dimly lit den with a fire place while doing it.

SquirrelQueen said...

I have to agree with some of the comments above, I would love to have heard Vincent Price read this poem.

Shiver!

Pat Tillett said...

SQ - I think we have concensus! Vincent it is...

Lynda Young said...

I so love this. It captures the season well :)

DrSoosie said...

Love the many facets to your blog. You have now gotten me more in the mood for Halloween!

Pat Tillett said...

Lynda - Thanks so much! one of my own favorites...

Pat Tillett said...

DrSoosie - thank you very much! I'm in the mood also...

Steadfast Ahoy! said...

Goosebumps all over!
Rosemary

Pat Tillett said...

Rosemary - If you have goosebumps, my writing was a sucess...thanks!

Pat Tillett said...

Rosemary - If you have goosebumps, my writing was a sucess...thanks!

Megan said...

Hey! Not bad, not bad at all!

Pat Tillett said...

Megan - thanks my friend!

Ann Best said...

My Queen of Halloween daughter loves this!

As creepy as anything I've ever read or seen!!

Ree said...

Ooh, good chilling stuff!

Pat Tillett said...

Ann - Thanks so much! I have a lot of "creepy" in me and it comes out around halloween...

Ree - Thanks! chilling is good...

Powdered Toast Man said...

loose bowel pinch is my favorite line by far...lol